Writers of the Revolution, May 13th

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Featured by IndigoSkyes

The very first piece of dreamsinstatic's I read had me hooked. As I explored his gallery, I discovered that not only is he a talented writer, but also incredibly active in the literature community here on dA. I highly recommend diving through his gallery and never surfacing.

Undressing PoetryShe clothes herself in poetry,
seals her skin within the verse.
Each line becomes another garment
that conceals her fixed form's curvature,
but peels away when read.
Last night I dissected a stanza,
clamped it tight between my teeth
and tugged it down her legs.
Her body breathes warm and sweet,
speckled red like a summer strawberry field.
I sucked the juice from her lines and
spit the punctuation like seeds.
My lips mouthed the shape of her words
as my skin grew more sticky with
every splash of imagery dripping down my chin.
I peeled apart her soft pages
with sticky, pink fingertips that left them
clinging to my skin.
A single flawless line remained
between the cloak of poetry, her and me,
so we spoke the words in unison,
revealing everything and setting her verse free.
Undressing Poetry
"Last night I dissected a stanza,/clamped it tight between my teeth/and tugged it down her legs."

This is the very first piece of dreamsinstatic that I read and instantly I loved it. It's incredibly sexy and incredibly clever, and makes you want to read it over and over.


Nighthawk
"I can't help but count the clicks of my footsteps/as I meander along the sidewalk,/a man has to do something to keep his mind off bitter things."

I have quite an affinity for this style of narrative poetry. The tone is melancholy, bittersweet, and haunting.


Famine
"It all spun down my throat/in a river of red and a mist of smoke/rising up from my lungs."

The sensory details in this piece are absolutely gorgeous. The end of the poem is brilliant as well, like divulging a secret to an old friend.


Dark Playground
"She said that ghosts/were kinder than the living and that/the more time you spent around them/the more you'd come to see/that the world of the living was/decaying faster than her friends below."

The girl in the poem will remind you of someone you once knew, or even someone you didn't, but might know in the future. (I know this is lame of me, but this is just so so good.)

We dreamsinstatic

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on Domestic Violence by ThermadorianGrey

Another weak line is "This machine kills fascists." Again, very heavy-handed, and yet cryptic. Is the speaker saying that the CVS workers are fascists? That society is filled by fascists? I don't get its purpose in the poem, except to make a flippant political statement that isn't fully explored, reasoned, or even explained within the context of the poem's narrative. The reader is unable even to determine whether one agrees or disagrees with the sentiment, because the sentiment could be almost anything.

A strong, chill-inducing line is "Bass-beating their ear-drums." I got a very clear image from this.[Read more here]

on House for the Bird-Cager by TheGlassIris

It mixes love and aching for love along with a generous craving for self pity from that person who you love and therefore from us readers (and I must remark here that I feel absolutely no pity for you) with the yearning of a writer for their words to be read and loved in the same way that they love them, and for people to read them carefully and treasure them. I like the latter very much - especially when you compare them with the ice-cream spoons and how the words push at you - pleading like songbirds. This a lovely analogy and I really like the way that you don't over-use it.
[Read more here]

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9 Editing Tips You (Possibly) Haven't Heard BeforeIn some form or another, we all know how to edit.  Maybe you're like me and there is some information in the back of your mind still hanging around from the 3rd grade grammar lessons. We all know subj-verb-obj, I before E except after C, etc. But when it comes to editing literature there are some more particular aspects of language that one should keep in mind in order to improve your story flow.
Categories:
1. Complicated Vocabulary
2. Cliché v Collocation
3. Reading Out Loud
4. Spellchecking
5. Getting Distance
6. Seeking Out Critique
7. Grammar Help
8. How to Use the Passive Voice and Why
9. Fixing Content Errors Before They Start
1. Least Complicated
A lot of times people get into trouble with their writing because they are either trying to emulate a certain style or because they're trying to 'sound smart', and it's not usually necessary. Yes, there are certain times that the bigger word will sound better and more appropriate, especially in period context, but most o

Tips on editing are really priceless. These nine tips will be able to help you out with some of the simpler things you may typically overlook, as well as a few of the more complicated aspects of editing.