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Prompt: December 24, 2012

Journal Entry: Sun Dec 23, 2012, 6:57 PM



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Santa Fe de BogotaSimón Bolívar found you como una Flor de Mayo.
I know that in your swelling city heart
you long por el mar, por la sal del mar,
but instead you straddle the roads,
hunker down over your landscape and breathe
your car fumes, inspiras las fumas como sombras,
espiras tranquilidad inquieta.
Colombia, madre, you have become
bloated in your old age, have grown your
ankles, pálidos e inflamados;
you should have been a sea lion,
morena y rapida y a la cresta como la espuma.
Mi alma, I will bring you the sea salt to run through your hair,
diamonds with which to crown your mane.

Santa Fe de Bogota by AzizrianDaoXrak.
"I know that in your swelling city heart
you long por el mar, por la sal del mar,

but instead you straddle the roads,
hunker down over your landscape and breathe"


This poem by AzizrianDaoXrak is a gorgeously bilingual piece that uses the word, monachopsis (noun, the subtle but persistent feeling of being out of place), from our last prompt to jump off into a cityscape that's at once urban and poetic. The way the speaker of the poem effortlessly slips from Spanish to English and vice versa creates a beautifully musical sound, as well as giving the poem a remarkably personal touch. This is a lovely poem of language that becomes very personal to the reader, as it depends on the reader's knowledge of Spanish (or English) - either way, it's a fantastically vivid work of writing that deserves your time.

Here is my accompanying critique on the piece.

Prompt

Think of your favourite plant (can be a tree, a flower, a vegetable, whatever you like) and then of an aspect of it that you don't normally focus on - whatever is the last thing that comes to mind about the plant. Incorporate this into your piece somehow. Example: if your favourite plant is an oak tree and you normally think about the leaves & branches, you could write about the smell of dried oak wood, or if it's a rose, you could use the roots of a rose bush.
By Solarune.

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:bulletred: Language is a Virus.
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Know-It-Like-A-Poet Dec 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Whoa great timing for this prompt. Where do I submit it to? Hopefully more than a few people will take this one on.
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To this folder [link] , the link is in the blog entry.

And indeed! :eager: I hope so too.
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Vigilo Dec 23, 2012  Student Writer
Glad you thought so! This is our favourites folder for works inspired by the prompts; just suggest your work and we'll accept it as soon as we can! :heart:
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